WALT: HOOK IN THE READER
I WILL REMEMBER TO:
- USE ADJECTIVES TO DESCRIBE
- USE INTERESTING WORDS
- USE PARAGRAPH(1 IDEA)
It’s Friday night and it’s game night. So we travel to our destination ‘a haunted house’. It’s dark and freaky.
My heart is pounding with fear. In my head, I’m thinking ‘what’s going to happen next’. Then “BAM” a brown, ugly door slam’s shut behind our terrified group. I started jogging, then I stop. I’m still freaked out. I finally whispered “STOP!”. Everything stops and I see my oldest brother laughing his heart out.
He’s standing there with his beaming new, black and white Nike t shirt and a pair of black Ban Davis shorts.
He has short, spiky, black hair that doesn’t move because of all the product he uses. His smooth tanned complexion catches the light, but his annoying tone in his ever present voice, echoes through the vacant space between us.
He has no experience of being creative in my mind. The frozen chills melt away as my fear turned to embarrassment.
MONTY YEAR 6 Term 4, 2010.